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This is the First Draft Thread!! In here will be the first place you are to present your work, from here you will also recieve constructive criticism about said piece. After that you are welcome to ignore said advice, work on your piece with that advice and no more or present again in the next thread for further critque =) The choice is yours, our hope is that people will find this a fun, interesting and learning experience. If any one has any problems or concerns feel free to PM Pharwynd or spirit9123.

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Chosen Piece: Batman by Pharwynd

1)(Compliment): I liked the water effect
Explanation: because it made it look like he was actually hitting the water, also the “flatness” of the water fitted in with the lego/painted like look.

2) (Critique): I didn’t like the water effect
Explanation: because it ends on the sides and some places at the bottom causing it to float, and become more of an effect rather then batman actually hitting the water.

Suggestion: Revision of the piece in respect to water effect
Links: http://tutorialsofawesomeness.com/watereffect

Piece for Presentation:

Yay! Finals are done! So I've been testing my skills and am determined to try out some new things..we'll see how that goes. Anyways, here's my latest attempt at a sig. Just a random one.

1) PrincessBell
[Heya Hun, I have already basically critiqued this with you earlier so I got my BF to help so part of this is his opinion ;p]

* I love the elven girl you used =) The angling and rendering is fantastic adds a sense of depth.
* The Contrast between the two colours of (maroony) purple and green and a mystical/fantasy feel to the work that is pleasing to the eye. (mine at least ;p)

* The brush work on the background (producing the vines) while pretty is a bit busy, particularly with the inclusion of the text.
--- Maybe making the brush work transparent or a lighter green colour will make it a little less busy or removing the text altogether

* If this was intended please ignore^^ but parts of the brush extend the boundries of the signature and appear cut off.
---If on purpose, maybe make the edges a bit rounded, or cropping it back to the boundries of the main background.



2) Lanaee

* I like the cool colours of this signature, makes the ambience peaceful and relaxed, and the shiny look gives it a modern appeal.
* the slight off centred balance of the central figure almost gives a sense of movement as if she is dancing/swaying to the music.

* Lack of or not enough border, I am not sure why but when I look at the signature I feel as if it needs framing, even slightly, especially if it is to be on a white background
--- Smexy border to frame the smexy work ;p
* I am a sucker for dots but the white ones behind the girl I am not sure about, maybe too dominant? (not much help lol I know )


I really look forward to seeing how and where you will take your pieces =)

My Art for critique is a bit different ;p, but not only signatures can be submitted here^^. I am working on a Flag banner for the guild LOST on Teos & Lailah. Let me know what you think ( In the end it will be resized for use on a profile.)

The background looks nice, the grunge effect gave it a pretty nice flow

But the render kinda just stops...It might be best if you added in a slight border to the bottom area to help make the render not seem like it is just stopping

I'd suggest looking at This tutorial by Harajuku on Borders to fully understand what I mean since...I believe I worded it very badly lol

The colors blend together quite well
-but i think the contrast is a bit high
~Maybe try to lower the contrast of light and darkness?

(what i like doing when i feel something is over contrasted, I add a layer on top that is filled with white, and put its opacity to 10%/Normal)

You have created a wonderful flow
-but there is a lot of empty space on the left side, a little on the right, and a _tiny bit on the top.
~Maybe try cropping it down a little on the sides? as for the top, crop it to where just a tiny amount of his head is cut out?(maybe)



(don't mind the white around the edges, it is meant for a white background - [click here to see it on white background]

like i said in the shaiya thread
nice depth and effects,
but the text is tiny and i don't like the render o.o
maybe it would look better with a different font?



(tried to make a different popout than usual o.o)

So here is a signature I made using some new brushes. Let me know what you think!

(don't forget, everyone needs at least 1 comment on their work before they can progress to the second thread. So please comment on those who need the comments to progress!!)



This one was stripped of its color and re-colorized. I'm not sure I like it but it was fun trying to color it.

Okie dokie going to do the ones I havent already done^^


[NOTE] On the subject of versus... I like the top one but then again I am a sucker for contrasts and bolds... (plus its disney like >.>) and on that note I shall rate the bold one ;p(I feel Spiriit covered the other well =) )

The warm colours give that warm fuzzy tingling feeling... like we can actually feel her happiness. The slightly off centred positioning also gives it a sense of realism (Perfection / Symmetry is often something associated with computers, and while can also be beautiful can also seem posed.. )

I am unsure about the technology aspects to the signature (computer based lines and cogs), they look snazzy but unsure if they fit with the look (unless its about technology taking over nature then ill just be quiet...). The white line on the left hand side has made an artificial border which especially on this black background makes it seem like its the border and not the border it self.

My only suggestions would be to move the line off maybe so that the image continues passed the borders and uses the border it self to contain it and keep making smexy work ;p

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The image is well blended and the effects while noticiable offer subtly that meld the image together well. The "Pop out is effective as it appears as if the subject is stepping(/running) out of the image making the popout flow and still feel "one" with the piece.

Only thing I would mention is that the 2nd subject/s are unclear when they become part of the background and not a pop out.(I am getting my eyes checked soon so it may just be me). Similar problem with the text Mathina, I agree text shouldn't always (some believe never) should be big enough to attract attention, But the word isnt overly clear and if I did not know already about Aragon and Mathina I am not sure I would have caught it first glance.

If any of what I said was not intentional making things clearer (doesnt have to be by sharpen) and maybe brightening the text for mathina might assist. Another alternative is to Ignore me entirely XD

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Something I worked on last night and think it might be fun to continue but not sure where to go from here so thought I would put it here for all your lovely comments and help =) Just something fun

Well I am a colour person if people havent already figured out and Red, Black and White is one of my favourite colour combinations XD. I Also like the flow of the piece, the positioning makes your eyes wander the length of the signature so a good use of space and flow.

The Jester on the left hand side, while balancing the piece colour wise feels detached from the rest of the image, possibly extended the artwork/brushes a bit further to "touch" the other might make it feel more connected. Not sure if you used a thin black border or not but in this case i think a more dominant border (same thickness or "thin") would add to the piece possible a dark red?



1 word CUTE!
This piece again has great flow, your eye is led around the piece. The colours, brushes and/or effects are vibrant and reaffrim the happy and almost festive feel portrayed by the main figures. The use of the "Bubbles" also did well to add depth to the piece.

I do not know why (but probably a rule of thirds.. spirit can explain better maybe o.o) but my eyes are drawn 1st to Dino then the word pebbles and then Pebble herself, Firstly it would be interesting to see if that happens to anyone else, if so maybe (if you dont want dino to be the first sight) bring Pebbles over a bit or make more dominant unsure again it could just be me. Pebble also feels a bit displaced from the rest of the scene, possibly using an effect/brush similar to what is already used in the piece and place it slightly on the fore ground in front of her (not on top to the side etc) might bring her together with the piece.

p.s why does everyone skip my siggies =( / art

EDIT: I made a siggy o.o


Its already in my premade thread for people to request but always looking for tips ;p

I use this site called Miss Bimbo. It's a kinda girly dress up site, but I love using the base as something to edit on... So, I do everything except the base character

Here are some of the results: (NOTE: The further you go down, the earlier the piece. It's a progress of me learning how to use layers, add alpha channels and shade etc. So the ones at the top are my most recent. I did have a go at some of the disney characters. as you can see...)



However, I would to know any hints you may have to help me improve! the aim of the game is to get better! xx

I'm impressed with both your designs and also your coloring technique, KVerity! These are really nice. Believe it or not I actually dabbled in some fashion design when I was younger as well.^^ I would suggest altering your base model so that you have a standard template that includes both front and back views. That will help you to visualize the design more completely. (where will the zipper go? hehe) If I find time, I'm gonna see if I can find one of my old drawings to share

P.S. I'm tickled by how she turned into a fox haha <3

P.P.S. hi, Bell ^^



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Okay I couldn't resist, I went and found this old drawing. The quality might stink a bit, but it's a good example of how thinking of various perspectives can really help you make a full design. Just a suggestion for you to consider in the future, because clearly you have an eye for details. I love the buckles and snaps you put on the denim pieces.

EDIT**[.img]took the pic down so I don't have to worry about it floating around cyberspace^^.jpg[/img.]**

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the 3/4 view was always just an extra option when I was playing around.

Front and Back only gives a very nice dynamic.

Since my sister gets my critique all the time and no pieces have been presented bar my sisters since mine I guess its time to present a piece for critiquing

(Remember to stick to the yin yang formula)



Been getting into noirish colour splash for a while this is one I made a few weeks back

your work is always so nice, it's hard to find things to say you could improve lol >.<

With this one I really like it overall. The subject is gorgeous, the colors are obviously fantastic, and the background gives really nice movement.

The downside is (and maybe this is just me) but I find the details in the very center get a little... unclear. It's hard for my brain to figure out what her hands are doing, and what that little, dark ball above her hands is. Were it my piece, I think I would remove the dark ball and maybe even modify the position of her hands. (potentially even removing her arms from the picture - giving the impression they're hidden behind the bubbles - in the process enhancing that smexy curve of her belly.) But, again, that's just me

Okay my turn I guess

Not sure how a critique will work with animated ones where the quality always suffers and I don't have much wiggle-room. But I'm totally open to any and all observations. (even "it'd be cool if you had room to ___") LOL!
I'm fine with the idea of trying to squeeze another thing into the 4kb I have left ^^
(Or just listen to things that bother other people about it to know for the future. Always interesting to hear other people's opinions.)



P.S. Once I get my studio I can probably post other versions I wish I could use